Showing posts with label Failed letters. Show all posts
Showing posts with label Failed letters. Show all posts

Thursday, November 13, 2008

Failed donation letter v13

Haiku's, limericks, and acrostics! Just a bad idea all around.

Haiku 1

A triathlon
Together as one, three sports

Like lines in haiku


Haiku 2

Race starts with swimming
Biking follows to dry off
Running and running

Limerick 1
There once was a triathlete named me
Who triathleted the best he could be
Now that you're reading my blog
Don't just sit on a log
I'd like to get a few bucks from thee


Acrostic 1
D - Donate?
Y - Y not donate?
L - Lots of money
A - and it's tax deductible and for a great cause!
N - No reason to say no!

R - Rah rah rah!
I - I can't believe how great this is
V - Verily much better than TV!
A - and Dylan is such a wonderful guy
S - Swimming! Biking! Running!

Failed donation letter, v7

This attempt followed the legendary advice of (I think) Yogi Berra who said something like when you get to a fork in the road just take it.

Dear friends and family,

For the past few months, I have been debating taking my life in a few different directions. The most practical and likely of these were to return to school or do a triathlon. To digress just a little, one of my great weaknesses but also one of my fondest habits is retreating into myself and over analyzing minor details to the point of near madness. Yes, I'm fond of that about myself and I miss it when I stop doing it. I've analyzed why and...

Anyway, I ended up framing the great MBA vs. Tri debate as the "get smarter vs. get better looking" paradox. I called it a paradox because it sounds intelligent (like I have an MBA!) and sort of makes me feel like I'm in a Borges short story or like Kafka is going to come to me in a dream and tell me what to do. An MBA would (hopefully) make me smarter and finally allow me to fire up those dynamic cranial nuero-processors rattling around in my head for something useful, like making a lot of money, crushing the every man, and finally having a reason to vote republican. A triathlon would get me into great shape, healthy, and maybe rekindle a little of my competitive passion. To put in the parlance of our youth, it's the great debate to get paid or get laid, to climb the corporate ladder or run the stairs, to make people green with envy or green with desire? So many choices...

I lost it there but nobody thought this was appropriate or that I could keep going. You know, I spent a few hours thinking about that and I...

Failed donation letter, v5

This was the authors attempt at being human in his donation request, trying to connect with the common man as it were. Let's look in and see if it worked:

Dear friends and family,
...

and nothing came out. Go figure.

Failed donation letters, v1

This is the first version of my donation request letter, but people said it was a little too aggressive...

Friends and family,
Have you noticed we are in the midst of a global economic meltdown? Did your retirement savings shrivel up into a little ball and hide under your covers? Are you worried about paying medical bills and electing socialists? It could be worse, you could have cancer. Lots of people do, and I'm trying to help them... then I was going to provide data about people who do have cancer.

They were probably right, this would not have worked.